Here's my response to the flash fiction starter sentence project. I actually had something longer planned in the beginning, but I felt this ending was appropriate.
http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=d4ddkvc_6fw67t474
I'm not sure if the last sentence really "jives" with the rest of the work, but it's supposed to be short, light, and wistful :)
Tell me what you think.
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Is there such a thing as a femtosecond? I wish I had bitchslapped time as a five-year-old, that would have been sweet.
ReplyDeleteNice closing sentence as well.
I wasn't sure if that last paragraph was figurative, literal, or in the child's imagination.
ReplyDeleteI guess bitchslapping time wouldn't readily spring from a child's mind, so I'm just going to go ahead and call it literal, like that episode of Futurama where Fry drinks 100 cops of coffee, except that I think this kid exploded at some point.
I kid, although I expect coffee that makes you trip out and then explode will be on shelves shortly. I think what's actually going on is just a kid hyped on a caffeine running around outside, except with more evocative language. It's certainly a set of descriptors that I would never have come up with (Bitchslapped time? Seriously?) and I think it does a great job of calling back what its like to just run around in the back yard. You know, as long as you don't take it literally.
Also it appears that a femtosecond is 0.000000000000001 second.
omfg loren, femtosecond = 1x10^-15 seconds, which is funny because you placed it out of numerical order (intentionally?) Pico is 10^-12.
ReplyDeleteLoved it. That girl bitchslapped time... and space.
Ha, yes, the last paragraph is not to be taken literally. She did not blow up... but then again, as the author, I can't tell you what happens, I create it and you interpret it, so sure, maybe she did; though, that's not what I had originally imagined :)
ReplyDeleteNick you caught me, I did place it out of order. I will fix that. I thought a picosecond was smaller than a femtosecond. I should have looked it up and not gone from memory!